Do not rely heavily on clichés - Find the exact words - Clarity

Rules for writers, Tenth edition - Diana Hacker, Nancy Sommers 2021

Do not rely heavily on clichés
Find the exact words
Clarity

The pioneer who first announced that he had “slept like a log” no doubt amused his companions with a fresh and unlikely comparison. Today, however, that comparison is a cliché, a saying that can no longer add emphasis or surprise.

To see just how predictable clichés are, put your hand over the right-hand column in the following list and then finish the phrases on the left.

busy as a

bee, beaver

cool as a

cucumber

dead as a

doornail

light as a

feather

avoid clichés like the

plague

The solution for clichés is simple: Delete them.

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Sometimes you can write around a cliché by adding an element of surprise. For example, one student who had written that she had butterflies in her stomach revised her cliché like this:

If all of the action in my stomach is caused by butterflies, there must be a horde of them, with horseshoes on.

The image of butterflies wearing horseshoes is fresh and unlikely, not predictable like the original cliché.