Use pyramid construction - Nine ways to save time and energy

100 ways to improve your writing - Gary Provost 2019

Use pyramid construction
Nine ways to save time and energy

Writing in the pyramid style means getting to the point at the top, putting the “who, what, when, where, and why” in the first paragraph, and developing the supporting information under it.

Newspapers use pyramid style because they are in the business of getting facts to readers as quickly as possible and because of the way news stories must be edited for print. When a newspaper editor has a seven-inch story that he or she has to put into a six-inch hole in the newspaper, that editor doesn’t run through the story with a pencil looking for useless adverbs or sentences that can be rewritten. He or she simply cuts an inch off the bottom. That is why each inch of a pyramid-style story should be less important than the inch that came before it.

You should use pyramid style for any short report and for any story that might be cut. And when you do, don’t put anything in paragraph 12 that the reader must know in order to understand paragraph 7.

Without Pyramid Construction

With Pyramid Construction

The flames could still be seen at dawn, flickering lights at the bottom of the canyon. Ethyl Murdock stood by, chuckling. “That’ll show them Detroit folks,” she said.

Mrs. Ethyl Murdock of Elgin, Illinois, pushed her new Dodge van off a cliff yesterday afternoon after the truck broke down for the sixteenth time since she bought it just a week ago.

Ethyl Murdock had just pushed her brand-new Dodge van off a cliff when she spoke those words . . .

At dawn today the flames from the van could still be seen flickering . . .