Accepted! 50 successful college admission essays - Gen Tanabe, Tanabe Kelly 2008

Index

Cooper, Samantha J. 148

Coughenour, Evan A. 84

admission

Culinary Creation 76

process 13, 56, 213

Curtis-Olsen, Zane 97, 107

subjectiveness 59

admission offi cer roundtable 56

essay advice 68

essay mistakes 65

Dad’s Pancakes 120

how applications are reviewed 56

Degen, Kathleen C. 154

qualities of successful essays 62

Doshi, Sameer H. 76

what surprises students 66

why admission is subjective 59

why colleges require essays 60

Eadie, Mark R. 91

Aesthetics & Calculus 181

editors 48

All Of 5’1” 195

11-Year-Old Scientist 175

Anand, Meena 185

essays

Arthuriana 104

25 worst essay writing mistakes 40

A Convergence Of Clashing Beliefs

admission offi cer roundtable 56

advice from admission offi cers 68

A Dog, A Cat & A Bird 136

essential strategies for writing 36

A Fall From Grace 129

examples 72

A Personal Challenge 200

mistakes 65

A Potato, A Seashell, A Pair Of Eye-

qualities of successful essays 62

glasses 141

questions 19

recycling 52

requirements 18

Bench-Pressing My Education 198

why colleges require them 60

Bengali, Shashank 163

word count 20

Birks & Barbies 78

writing workshop 36

Bloom, Jonathan 179

essay examples 72

Bowman, Shor 87

11-Year-Old Scientist 175

Bozman, Jeff 166, 193

about extracurricular activities and

brainstorming topics 24

athletics 148

Building 91

about family 107

about infl uential books 97

about infl uential people 123

about issues 187

California Boys’ State 151

about jobs and careers 183

Carpe Diem 100

about math and science 175

Carroll, Gabriel D. 81, 139, 208

about music 169

Christopher 132

about overcoming a weakness or

Common Application 52

challenge 195

Conley, William T. 45, 57, 60, 62, 67,

about personal beliefs 73

about places 206

Index

about things that represent me 135

The Bowman Gallery 87

about writing essays 146

The Crossroads 208

Aesthetics & Calculus 181

The Gang 163

All Of 5’1” 195

The Great Search 146

Arthuriana 104

The Hawaiian Good Luck Sign 193

A Convergence Of Clashing Beliefs

The Morning Ritual 161

The Rules For Being Human 84

A Dog, A Cat & A Bird 136

The Slice Of Life 81

A Fall From Grace 129

Twelve Bobby Pins 115

A Personal Challenge 200

Visits To The Hospital 185

A Potato, A Seashell, A Pair Of

Why 145

Eyeglasses 141

Wurly 173

Bench-Pressing My Education 198

essay mistakes 40

Birks & Barbies 78

assuming knowledge 47

Building 91

fl exing 44

California Boys’ State 151

generalizing 46

Carpe Diem 100

getting stuck on introduction 42

Christopher 132

ghost writers 47

Culinary Creation 76

gimmicks 44

Dad’s Pancakes 120

humor 43

From Struggle To Success 202

lazy sentences 46

Gordito 156

my name is 47

Growing Up 94

not editing 48

Hodge-Podge 143

not showing 46

How Podiatry Begat Oratory 148

overquoting 42

How Rocky Changed My Life 169

procrastinating 46

Hurricane Andrew 117

relying too much on thesaurus 43

IDIC, Anyone? 73

revealing too much 48

Inspiration To Learn 127

second-guessing admission offi cers

In For The Long Crawl 187

In The Field 177

sentimentalizing 47

Lessons From Harry Potter 102

sob story 44

More Than A Tutor 183

Mosier, Elizabeth 37, 58, 60, 61, 64,

Haberer, Misty M. 146

Hamad, Rita 195

Moy, Stephanie 89

Haskins, Jessica 73

My Hill 206

Heikamp, Emily 102, 145

My Mother’s Infl uence 107

Heras, Daniel 109

My Voice 204

Hochman, Alyssa 161

Hodge-Podge 143

Hopkins, Adam Bayne 143

Number Theory & Vehicle Weight

How Podiatry Begat Oratory 148

Distribution 179

How Rocky Changed My Life 169

humor 40, 43, 45

Hurricane Andrew 117

Hyde, Lindsay 158

Oleck, Cecilia A. 132

On Prejudice 191

On The Water 154

Organ Donor Project 158

IDIC, Anyone? 73

originality

Inspiration To Learn 127

importance of 26, 37

internet

Osgood, Peter 19, 59, 62, 65, 66, 69,

applications 21

In For The Long Crawl 187

Ou, Jacqueline 123

Index

Paperboy 139

Tanabe, Gen and Kelly 14, 224

Peterson, Lloyd 13, 57, 59, 60, 63,

Tanabe, Gen S. 120

Tanabe, Kelly Y. 204

Pilloud, Robert 130

Thai, Evelyn 129

Pleitez, Emanuel 206

The 20 Other Points 166

Polyhedra 123

The Beer-Sheva Marketplace 111

Potts, Robin 114

The Bowman Gallery 87

Prelude & Liebestod 171

The Crossroads 208

Public & Private 189

The Gang 163

The Great Search 146

The Hawaiian Good Luck Sign 193

The Morning Ritual 161

recycling 52

The Rules For Being Human 84

warnings about 54

The Slice Of Life 81

Thorp, Michael 41, 58, 61, 63, 65,

Saat, Daniel 111

Twelve Bobby Pins 115

Salinas, Robert 127

Santiago’s Fight 97

Singla, Svati 100, 175

Uribe, Daniel Alexander 197

Special Features

College admission: art or science?

How fi nal decisions are made 213

Visits To The Hospital 185

How humor can kill an essay 45

Is this a trick question? 19

Memorable essay: Cracking your

brain open 131

Watkins, Jim 158

Memorable essay: Melodies of life

Why 145

Wurly 173

Memorable Essay: My new brother

Memorable essay: Snow junkie 96

Yee, Gregory James 169

Memorable essay: Spaghetti sauce

Too much detail 29

When the big game is a big mistake

Zhang, Nenhan 201

You are the subject of your essay

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Gen grew up in Waialua, Hawaii. Between eating banana-fl avored shave ice and basking in the sun, he was president of the Student Council, captain of the Speech Team and a member of the tennis team. A graduate of Waialua High School, he was the fi rst student from his school to be accepted at Harvard. In college, Gen was chair of the Eliot House Committee and graduated magna cum laude with a degree in both History and East Asian Studies.

Kelly attended Whitney High School, a nationally ranked public high

school in her hometown of Cerritos, California. She was the editor of the school newspaper, assistant editor of the yearbook and founder of a public service club to promote literacy. In college, she was the co-director of the HAND public service program and the brave co-leader of a Brownie Troop. She graduated magna cum laude with a degree in Sociology.

Gen, Kelly, their son Zane and their dog Sushi live in Belmont, California.

Document outline

· Copyright

· Contents at a Glance

· Table of Contents

· Chapter 1. The Almighty Admission Essay

o Why the admission essay is critical

o College admission: art or science?

o What we can teach you about successful admission essays

· Chapter 2. The Ingredients Of The Essay

o Why you should care about the essay

o Essay questions you’re likely to face

o Is this a trick question?

o The dreaded word count

o Technology to the rescue or not

· Chapter 3. How To Find The Perfect Topic

o Begin with a brainstorm

o The litmus test for originality

o Analyze your topic’s revealing qualities

o Challenge your topic with these questions

o Too much detail

o Just plain dumb topics

· Chapter 4. The Essay-Writing Workshop

o Writing your masterpiece

o Essential strategies for writing a great essay

o You are the subject of your essay

o 25 worst essay-writing mistakes

o When the big game is a big mistake

o How humor can kill an essay

o The importance of editors

· Chapter 5. Recycling Your Essays

o Don’t throw away a good essay

o The Common Application: The ideal way to recycle

o Modifying an existing essay

o A final warning about recycling

· Chapter 6. Roundtable With Admission Officers

o Meet the admission officers

o What happens to the essay once it is received?

o Why is the admission process so subjective?

o What’s the real reason for the essay?

o What impresses you when you read an essay?

o What common mistakes do students make?

o What surprises students about how you read their essays?

o What advice do you have for writing essays?

· Chapter 7. 57 Successful Admission Essays

o Personal beliefs & reflections

o Memorable essay: Snow junkie

o Influential books

o Essays about family

o Memorable essay: Melodies of life

o Influential people

o Memorable essay: Cracking your brain open

o Things that represent me

o Memorable essay: Spaghetti sauce

o Essays about writing essays

o Extracurricular activities & athletics

o Memorable essay: My new brother

o Essays about music

o Math & science

o Essays about jobs & careers

o Essays about issues

o Overcoming a weakness or challenge

o Essays about places

· Chapter 8. Parting Words

o You can write a breathtaking essay

o How final decisions are made

· Appendix: Web Resources

· Index

· More Books By SuperCollege

· About The Authors