7 Steps to Better Writing - Charles Maxwell 2020
Keep related words together
Step 6 – Revise
Keep associated words together. Here are examples.
Poor: Related Words Separated |
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The corporation proceeded with the investment to expand the factory to manufacture a key component for $150,000,000. |
Better: Related Words Kept Together |
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The corporation proceeded with the $150,000,000 investment to expand the factory to manufacture a key component. |
Poor: Related Words Separated |
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The machinist gave gaskets to the apprentice with neoprene lining. |
Better: Related Words Kept Together |
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The machinist gave gaskets with neoprene lining to the apprentice. |
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The machinist gave the apprentice gaskets with neoprene lining. |
Poor: Related Words Separated |
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The vendor sold the hydraulic drive to the company without a motor. |
Better: Related Words Kept Together |
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The vendor sold the hydraulic drive without a motor to the company. |